如何在个人陈述中巧妙地炫耀自己的成就

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ChaseFuture.com 导师 Eva Shang

哈佛大学｜经济学

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Once you've picked a topic for your essay, you need to find a way to incorporate all of your accomplishments.

When you write an application once selected the theme, you have to find your way up a summary of all achievements.

当你一旦选定了个人陈述的主题后，你要想办法将自己所有的成就都在文书中表现出来。

There are two routes you can go about this, both equally viable depending on your essay style and your personality. You can be subtle or you can be upfront. I've read successful examples of both.

You have two options, according to your writing style and personality, two options are feasible. You can also choose clever way straight to the point. I have read these two successful examples.

根据你文书的风格和你的个性，有两种表达方式。你可以非常含蓄，也可以非常直白地表述。两种成功的例子我都见过。

I have a very upfront personality, so my essays all featured upfront paragraphs on accomplishments. For example, in my essay about my sister and my work with girls in Girl Scouting and the UN Foundation, I wrote that my sister inspired me to help other girls and make the world a better place for girls. That was the only transition, before I launched into "This past year, I did this and that and this." I kept it to one paragraph in an otherwise very personal essay, and tried not to bore the reader, who can read all of that in my extracurricular page anyway.

I am an outspoken person, so I wrote my achievements when passages are straight to the point. For example, when writing about my sister, Girl Scouts and the United Nations Foundation, within the life of the article, I wrote my sister inspired me to help others, contributing to society. Before I go to a new topic, "Over the past year, I have done this kind of thing," This is my only transitional sentence. In the application, I try to transition over a period of some control, so as not to let the reader feel boring, and if they want to read, then let them read the attached better.

我个性率直，所以我在个人陈述里非常直接地写了我的成就。比如，在写我姐姐和我在女童子军和联合国基金会工作时，我写到我姐姐激励我去帮助其他女孩，创造一个更加适合女性生存的世界。我只写了一个段落，然后文章就转入下一个话题。我不想让读者感到乏味，因为他们完全可以在我课外活动那一页看到相同的内容。

This worked for me because my entire essay was very personal. I recently talked to my admissions officer, and she said, "We could tell that you're a very genuine person who isn't afraid to speak up." My straightforward personality came through, and that was the reason I was able to write about my accomplishments without any artifice.

As I am talking about the whole article is a personal thing, so this trick useful to me. I recently read my article and apply for official talked about, she said:. "We look out you are a very sincere person, outspoken" I frankly personality revealed itself, and this is what I wrote, I can easily The reason achievement lies.

这样写使我的个人陈述非常贴近读者。我的招生官对我说，“我可以看出你是一个非常真诚、敢于表达自己的人。”因为我个性率真，所以我能够毫不掩饰地写出我的成就。

The other, equally viable route, is to be slip mentions in subtly and remind the admissions officer casually that you've accomplished these things.

Another method is feasible, it is subtly express their feelings, inadvertently reminded official application to discover your accomplishments.

另一个同样可行的方法是含蓄地，看似漫不经心地向招生官提及你的成就。

If the general tone of your essay is more slow and contemplative, reflective of your more thought-out and paced personality, it will feel brash and arrogant to include your list of accomplishments. Instead, successful essays with slower, more subtle tones also include accomplishments with more subtle references.

If your application is slow and the tone of the text thoughtful, more thinking reflects the character of your love, then write directly to your achievements will seem you are very arrogant. On the contrary, the success of the application documents, if it is a slow subtle tone, then it is written that the achievement is to have a profound and subtle.

如果你文章的基调是舒缓的、冥想的、反思性的，反映出你思虑周到、节奏缓慢的个性的话，那么直接写出你的成就会使人感到草率和傲慢。相反，可以采用舒缓含蓄的笔调微妙地影射你的成就。

One successful essay I read from a classmate talked about how a certain biology professor had inspired him. Because this was less personal, he included his later awards in biology research as a casual reference towards the end, "I met this professor finally in person when we were both presenting our research at a conference. "Relating to the story, but subtle enough to catch the reader's attention without seeming arrogant.

I read an article the successful application of my classmates, about a biology teacher how to inspire him. In view of this article is not about the individual, at the end of the article, he talked about the achievements of their biological research on: "I was in the final meeting of a joint research results show saw him in person." Such tactics contacted the full text, but subtle enough to attract readers attention, while not people think he is very arrogant.

我读过我同学写的一篇很成功的文章，讲他的生物老师是如何激励他的。文章的风格含蓄，所以在提及他之后在生物研究上获奖时，他以一种非常随意的口吻在结尾时写道：“当我们俩在一个学术会议上宣读我们的研究报告时，我终于见到了我的导师。”这样的写法即扣住了主题，又以含蓄的方式抓住了读者的注意力，而又不显得傲慢。

Yet even being subtle isn't universally applicable. Imagine how awkward it would have been if I had attempted to be subtle in my essay. "My sister is the reason I believe in girls. As she talked about her American Girl doll collection, I reminded her that I was going to be out of town for a conference speaking about girls in developing countries. "That would have seemed odd.

But this subtle approach is not a panacea. Imagine my application if I wrote the article will be how lame: "My sister is the reason I believe that women's rights when she talked about her American doll collection, I reminded her that I was going out of town to go to a meeting. speech, talking about girls in developing countries. "as written words would be too weird.

但是，含蓄的手法并不是万能的。想象一下，为了显得含蓄，我这样写：“我姐姐激励了我。当她在说她美国玩具娃娃的收藏时，我提醒她我要去外地参加一个会议，并在会上发言，谈发展中国家的女孩。”这将是多么尴尬和奇怪。

It depends on the style of the essay and your personality. If you were speaking in conversation, would you be upfront or would you be subtle? What flows naturally in your essay?

What kind of technique depends on the tone of your article and your character. Assuming you are in dialogue with others, you'll be frank with people still using some obscure words? Your article can naturally express it?

采用哪种写作手法完全取决于你文书的风格和你的个性。假设你在坦诚地与人对话，难道你会选用晦涩难懂的字眼吗？尽量使你要表达的内容在文书中自然地流露出来。

And most importantly, remember what your readers want to know: Who are you?

The most important thing is to remember what your readers want to know: Who are you?

最重要的是要记住读者想要了解的是：你是什么样的人？

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